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4) KENDINIZE DEGER BICIN
Asagidaki bir kac calisma
bazi konulari aydinlatmaya yariyacaktir.Oncelikle bir liste yapmaniz
gerekmektedir.Bu listede her okula soracaginiz sorularin listesidir.Okulun
adini yazdiktan sonra mumkun oldugu kadar bosluk birakin ve kafanizda olusan
ama cevabini bilmediginiz sorular varsa hemen yanina bir not dusun.
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ALISTIRMALAR
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Kronolojik Metod;
Oncelikle cocukluk yillarindan baslayin ve sizing icin onemli olan
hayatinizdaki donum noktalarinin listesini yapin.Her aldiginiz nottan,
calistiginiz islerden notlar alin,Ders aldiginiz bir olayi, tecrubeyi
yazin.Elde ettiginiz basarilari listeleyin,cok aci cektiginiz bir ani yazin,
ustesinden gelemediginiz dusunceler buna neler engel oluyor, dusunceleriniz,
hisleriniz butun bu olaylari kaleme alin.Eger gozlemci bir insansaniz ve tam
zamanlari hatirliyorsaniz bunlari listeleyin.Gecminizle ilgili yuzlerce
kendinize soracaginiz soru oldugu icin hic dokunulmamis dusuncelerinizi bnir
cok cevaplar bulabilirsiniz.Bir kac okul sizing cocuklugunuzla ilgili
sorular soracaktir ve bun;lari hatirlamanizi istiyecektir.Hemen akliniza
gelen ufak ve degeri olmayan olaylari gundeme getirmeyin.Eger gecmisinizde
cok deger verdiginiz ve gurur duydugunuz bir olay varsa bu size iyi bir konu
olacabilir.Bununla beraber cocuklugunuzdaki uzun zaman tutkularinizi ve
genclik cagina gectiginiz zaman bu tutkulardaki degisimi yada koklesen
tutkulariniz yazabilirsiniz.
ORNEK
A creek is no
place for shoes. I think it's unreasonable to ask children to keep their
shoes on in such a place. My bare feet were always covered with calluses
from walking down the rough pavement of Peardale Street and around the
corner, past the weeping willows, but not as far as the Lindsay's
squeaky old swing-set. It was hard to see from the road, and as far as I
could tell, nobody ever went there-except for me. Large pines nearby
stood tall and erect, looking down at the ripples and currents that
nudged each other about playfully, like children in the back seat of a
car on a long drive. Stones and pebbles lined the shallow bottom and
allowed the water to glide in creative patterns over their smooth
surfaces. Larger, moss covered rocks dotted the bank and provided ideal
spots for a child to sit and watch and wonder.
The creek often taught me things; it was my mentor. Once I discovered
tadpoles in several of the many eddies and stagnant pools that lined the
small rivulet. A cupped hand and a cleaned-out mayonnaise jar aided me
in clumsily scooping up some of the more slothful individuals. With
muddy hands and knees, I set them on the kitchen counter, and watched
them daily as they developed into tiny frogs. I was fascinated by what
was taking place before my eyes, but new questions constantly puzzled
me. Dad was usually responsible for assuaging these curiosities. He told
me about different kinds of metamorphosis and how other little tiny
creatures lived in the water that I couldn't see without a fancy
magnifying glass.
By the creek, my mind was free to wander. I remember sitting silently on
a mossy rock and watching the birds; I used to pretend I was one. As my
body lay still, my imagination would take flight. High above, looking
down on this stream from the pale blue heavens, the wind whistled over
my face and the sun warmed my body. When my eyes flickered open, it was
usually time to go home. Sometimes I even did.
I was always up for a challenge. My sister and I used to jump from rock
to rock, in a kind of improvised hop-scotch obstacle course that tested
our balance and agility against one another. She was four years older
and I had to practice every morning when she was at school in order to
keep up. On the rare occasions that I outdid her, I wore a goofy smirk
for the rest of the day.
The creek was a frontier. The stream extended far into the depths of the
woods. I thought that if I wandered too far into its darkness, I might
be consumed by it and never heard from again. Gradually overcoming my
fear, I embarked on expeditions and drafted extensive maps using my
father's old compass, a sheet of paper, and a few colored pencils. As my
body grew in height and weight, my boundaries grew in extent and
breadth.
Years later, I happened to be walking to a friend's house by way of the
creek. It occurred to me that what was once an expedition was now merely
a shortcut. Although I had left this stream behind, I found others: new
questions and freedoms, new challenges and places to explore. But this
creek would remain foremost in my memory, whatever stream, river, or
ocean I might wade.
Comments
You can also
use a childhood example to demonstrate a long-standing passion or to
emphasize how an aspect of your character is so ingrained that it has
been with you since youth. The writer of the above essay does this, for
example, when explaining his early passion for exploring.
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Basarilariniza Deger Bicin;Ovundugunuz
seyleri yazin.bunun kucuklugu veya buyuklugu onemli degildir.Basarilarinizi
meydana getirdiginiz herseyi limitlemeden yazin.Eger bazi kisilik
problemleri yasadiginiz yada toplumdan sizi iten seyler varsa bunlari
cekinmeden yazin.Hayatinizdaki onemli seyler sizing degerinizide
gosterir.Unutmayin bu bolum sizing essay icin hazirlik yaptiginiz bir
bolumdur.ne kadar cok sey meydana cikarsa ve “beyinfirtinasi” yaparsaniz
yaziniza o derecede hakim olursunuz.
ORNEK
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Throughout my
life, I have had to face few outward travails. On the surface,
everything comes easy to me. I have never gone hungry or had any
physical challenges. And yet, I have had to overcome many inner
obstacles over the years. I have a strong sense of purpose and a
morality which binds me rigidly. But, at the same time, I admit that I
was born a coward. It has taken years of effort and endurance, goaded by
my sense of right and wrong, for me to reach where I am today. And over
the years, there have been times where my future character was decided
in a conflict between fear and morality.
When I was ten, I
was on a swim team which included an eighteen-year-old boy with Down's
Syndrome. Because of his slurred speech and other physical handicaps, he
was never really an accepted member of the team. At first, his size and
physical traits made me afraid of him. But I spoke with my father, and
he explained the other boy's problem. It was then I decided to befriend
the boy. With time, we became good friends. Surprisingly enough, I found
myself in the position of the older boy: putting up with his "childish"
antics, tying his shoelaces, and teaching him games.
Half a year
went by and we were eventually moved up to the next level, practice
times were changed. Unfortunately, on the very first day, there was
trouble. The older boys (aged twelve to fifteen) began to make fun of my
friend. Although he was physically stronger than the others, my peaceful
friend did not know how to deal with the verbal abuse. I was upset but I
was also afraid of the older boys. But then, the mocking became physical
and my anger overcame my fear. In a heat of rage belying my ten years
and frail body, I jumped onto a bench, yelling back. Moments later, I
found myself in a hopeless fight against an older boy.
The fight would
seal any hopes I had of making myself accepted. Nevertheless, thinking
back, the incident still brings tears to my eyes. For a split moment,
when he rushed in to save me, I looked into my friend's eyes. And
within, I saw something which cannot be fully described in words. It was
neither outright gratitude nor a mocking "You shouldn't have done that."
But for the first time, I truly understood exactly what he wanted to
say.
Comments by
Admissions Officers who Assisted in the Creation of this Course
Good effort, but I
wish he had made more of his conclusions.
If I had been
advising the author before he sent in this essay, I might have suggested
that he make the tone just a little less self-deprecating. For example,
his statement, "I have a strong sense of purpose and a morality which
binds me rigidly. But, at the same time, I admit that I was born a
coward," plays against the overall tone of the essay. Unless one is
attending a religious institution, one is going to encounter people with
a wide variety of value systems. "A morality which binds me rigidly"
will concern an admissions committee that is looking to build a class of
people who learn from one another. This does not mean that you cannot
make it clear that you have your own strong set of values. It just means
that you should be careful of the language you use to describe it.
I wonder if the
word "travails" in the first sentence was actually the first word that
came to the author's mind. It sounded immediately to me as though he had
checked a thesaurus for a fancier word than "trials" or "problems," and
it sounded unnatural and forced. As a rule, try not to use words that
you wouldn't use in normal conversation.
This essay was
rather disappointing. It was short and not fully developed. The topic of
the essay was interesting but the writer completed the essay without
delving into the relationship with the young boy with Down's syndrome.
The essay leaves the reader without much to go on. The student could
have expanded more about the relationship and how becoming friends with
someone with D.S. has affected his perspective on life.
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Butun Yeteneklerinizi
Listeleyin;Onceki arastirmaya benzeyen bu bolumde listeleme yapacaginiz
yetenekler daha cok disariya gosterebileceginiz yetenekleriniz olabilir.Bunu
bir jurinin onunde gosteri yapiyormus gibi dusunebilirsiniz.Bu yeteneginizi
yada yeteneklerinizi listeleyin.Bazi yetenekler cok acik olabilir, bunlar
iyi resim yapmak, muzikal yada atlatik olabilir.Bazi yetenekler ise daha guz
algilanan yetenekler olabilir, bunlarin onemli oldugunu unutmayin.
ORNEK
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Harvard,
Favorite Books
The novel Black
Like Me was the most stimulating book I have recently read. I was
taken aback by the cruelty the narrator experienced when he was black
compared to the hospitality he found as a white man. Possessing the same
occupation, clothing, wealth, speech, and identity did not matter when
his skin was another color. Given that this was a non-fictional piece,
my reaction was even stronger. The book made me favor equality of
opportunity for all in every endeavor so others' opinions of them are
based on performance, not preconceptions.
Harvard,
Favorite Teacher
I selected Mr.
(name) because he taught me more than U.S. History; he taught me how to
think independently. This wasn't done only to prepare me for the
free-response section of the A.P. test, either. I know he did it to make
his students responsible citizens and responsible adults. From the
outset, he wanted to make sure that we knew how we stood in our
political philosophy: strict constructionists or loose constructionists.
He wanted to make sure that we didn't gravitate towards empty categories
like liberal or conservative, but rather focused on issues separately
whenever we needed to take a stand on them. Imagine my surprise when I,
the son of two very conservative parents who constantly bombarded me
with their rhetoric, discovered that I had strong liberal tendencies on
some issues. Aside from political affiliations, Mr. (name) taught us how
to make sense out of history by trying to understand the personal
motives that went in to any chain of historical occurrences. In his
class, I came to the realization that history isn't only a series of
names and dates printed in a textbook, but a more complex subject that
requires deep thought and analysis for full comprehension. Because of
Mr. (name), history is now my favorite subject. He has also been a
motivating force outside of the classroom. He always had faith in my
ability and constantly encouraged me to do my best. I believe he
respected my abilities and wanted to see them developed further. In
fact, had it not been for his faith in me, I would have never applied to
Harvard, the school I plan to attend in the fall.
Harvard, the
"grip test"
Describe an
accomplishment that was important to you but went unnoticed.
It's not that
I'm a weak guy, just that I had been somewhat self-conscious about my
strength early on in my high school career. My gym class didn't help too
much, either. Thanks to a demeaning test of strength appropriately
dubbed the "Grip Test," once each quarter I was provided the opportunity
to squeeze a gadget, get a score, and have my teacher announce it out
loud, no matter how high or (as in my case) how low it was. No matter
how hard I tried, the cruel and callous scale never registered above 40.
Almost every other male in the class could boast of a high-40's or
mid-50's score. I hated that test with a passion. Until recently. When
this semester rolled around and I had the gripper placed in my palm, I
was prepared for the same old same old. I had been improving slightly
from quarter to quarter, but nothing impressive ever happened. I drew in
a deep breath, squeezed, looked at the scale, and almost fainted.
Sixty-six! In a way only a teenager can appreciate, for an
accomplishment only a teenager would find meaningful, I thought I was in
heaven. My success was even sweeter as I watched jocks pale in
comparison when they took the test. Sure, to some people my academic
accomplishments seem fairly impressive, and I would agree. Yet the grip
test situation was much more personal and represented success in an area
I normally don't pay attention to. Plus I learned two things. One: I can
pride myself on the smallest triviality. Two: I'm glad we don't measure
strength in our gym classes with the bench press.
Harvard,
Leadership through Dedication
To me,
leadership does not necessarily mean accumulating as many titles as
possible in school activities; I feel one leads through his dedication,
actions, and contributions. I have always tried to lead in almost
everything I set out to do. I feel I have been successful at that.
Superficially, I have earned such titles as president of the National
Honor Society chapter at my school, Editor-in-Chief, columnist,
Investigative Editor, and Editorial Editor of the school newspaper,
senior varsity leader in debate, and a Class Representative for Student
Council. However, those titles don't begin to tell the story of my
abilities as a leader. They don't reveal how I volunteered to help out
at a handicapped lock-in at an unfamiliar youth center when no one else
wanted to, they don't reveal how I always sought to be on time for work
and to avoid boondoggling, they don't reveal how I aided younger
debaters with their argumentation so they can have the same success I
was lucky enough to enjoy, they don't reveal how I became a role model
for the JETS squad by studying my material often, eventually becoming
the most medaled member on the team, and they don't reveal all the
effort I put into learning my lines and acquiring a good stage presence
for Images, my first stage production ever, so I wouldn't
single-handedly jeopardize the whole show with my lack of experience.
All those actions stress the quality I feel is most important in a
leader, dedication. With dedication comes hard work and the ability to
seek out solutions when problems get in the way, whether they are with a
news page layout or in a student's diction. Because of this dedication,
taking charge is second nature for me. People are always willing to
follow one with a clear sense of direction.
Harvard,
Close-knit family
I don't view my
important characteristics as different from those my family has imparted
on me throughout the years. The pride, care, dedication, effort, and
hard-working attitude that I view as critical to any success I may
achieve have all descended upon me courtesy of my close-knit, Italian
family.
Born the child
of two immigrants who came here with nothing, only one possessing a
college degree, the importance of a good work ethic was stressed by my
parents from day one. Through their actions in their jobs and through
the verbal lessons on life I began to get from the moment I could
communicate, they set an example for me to follow, one of being proud of
what I do, no matter what it was, and above all, to care about
everything I do as if everything had a big impact. This meant that
everything had to be done right and be done well. Undoubtedly, following
their own advice carried my parents from their status as blue-collar
immigrants who labored as a factory workers to white-collar citizens,
one of whom owns his own business while the other works as a bank
officer. Those ascensions from nothing only served as other examples for
me to follow, examples that delineated the ability for a person to
improve through effort.
Another
quotation from my father propelled me from the time I started school to
today: "No matter what you do, you have to be the best." This set up the
inner drive that motivates all my actions. It was what forced me to try
hard in school although I didn't know English well enough to always
understand the teacher. It's the reason why I have developed my skills.
It accounts for my dedication to all activities, and to the hard work I
put into all of them as I strive to lead both in class and out.
Essentially, my parentage was the first quality that distinguished me as
a leader.
Despite all the
talk of being a leader, I have never lost sight of the importance of my
family. I know I owe my family everything, and as a result, I'll always
be close with it.
Harvard, Fun
I pursue a
variety of activities for fun and relaxation. I enjoy reading books and
magazines (my tastes range from Time to Gentlemen's Quarterly) on a
regular basis, imitating Beavis and Butt-head, and most of all, spending
time with my friends. Although I am fan of playing pick-up games of
basketball, football, and roller hockey, the phrase "doing nothing with
my time" doesn't bother me since I can have a good time just hanging
around. I think people, not places, make for a good time.
Harvard,
Social Concerns
My major social
concerns all revolve around the future. In other words, I'm concerned
about what prevents people from rising above their disadvantages.
Specifically, I am most concerned with the handicapped, education, and
crime.
I feel
society's response to handicaps is what really hampers the potential of
the disabled. It is important for the disabled to get a better sense of
worth and to be able to adapt to, and survive in, today's world. Through
National Honor Society (NHS), I have done just that. I have helped out
at a lock-in that was designed to foster interaction among the children
of the organization, as well as at Special Olympics, where the children
participate in sports on a competitive basis so their talents and
abilities can be recognized. Whenever the disabled can be successful at
an activity, the barrier between them and the rest of society is
drastically reduced.
Education is
key to other problems such as gangs, drugs, and crime because it can
prevent and eliminate them. I try to get students in our school to
maximize their opportunities by using the educational resources
available. By setting up a tutoring program through NHS, I have matched
up needy students with other students who can assist them with their
problems in classes. More directly, I help students out with English and
show them how to use the Writing Center Lab, an indispensable resource
for English students at any level. The more educa-ted a person is, I
believe, the more able he is to be successful in the future.
I have dealt
with criminal problems in my school by discussing solutions to gangs and
other crime in the Student Advisory Committee. We have drafted several
proposals to help reduce those problems in our school.
Educating
people about such social concerns is also very crucial because they
won't fix what they don't think is broken. That is one objective of our
newspaper, in which we have written various editorials and news stories
to educate the student body on social topics. Through debate, I myself
have become knowledgeable on such topics as the homeless, poverty,
health care, and the environment. That way I can practice what I preach.
Comments
Harvard is
notorious for its long list of essay questions, as you can see from the
seven essays this applicant had to write. The first essay is a standard
favorite book essay. His second, about his favorite teacher, goes into
more depth and reveals more about the candidate, that he enjoys
learning, admires independent thought, and plans to study history.
The third essay
in this set stands out from the rest. Had the panel who were grading the
compositions understood the context of this essay in light of the six
others in the set, they probably would have given it more credit. Its
strength lies in its funny, lighthearted approach -- it shows a
completely different aspect of the candidate's personality. Without it,
he would have appeared deadpan serious and probably a bit dull. However,
showing the wittier side of himself strengthens the set considerably. It
is a good example of allowing yourself to take a risk in one essay, as
long as more serious approaches in the others balance it. The writing
style in most of these essays is below average.
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Kisiliginizi Analiz Edin;Bazen
yetenekler ile karakter arasinda uysmazlik vardir.eger bazi yeteneklerinizi
listelemede problem yasiyorsaniz, karakterinizin saglamligi uzerine
yogunlasin.Bir kac satir vesutun cizerek su listeyi yapmaya calisin.Once
karakterinizle ilgili sifat’lari kisa olarak yazin.Ikinci satira
arkadaslariniz sizing icin soyledikleri sifatlari siralayin.Diger bir satira
hayatinizin bir doneminde bulunan yada onem verdiginiz kisilerin size olan
sifatlandirmalarini listeleyin-bu kisiler ogretmenleriniz, aile uyelerinden
birisi,akraba yada sinif arkadasiniz olabilir.Bunlar bitince en cok gundeme
gelen sifatlandirma hangisi ise bunu listeleyin ve bunlari degisik
durumlarda ortaya koyun.Hangi siklikta ve verimli bir sekilde bu
tanimlamalari –sifatlandirmalari ispatliyabileceginizi kendinizde test edin,
sadece bu ozelliklerinizi vurgulamaniz ispatlatmadikca bir anlami yoktur.
ORNEK
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Some say that
mankind is complex beyond comprehension. I cannot, of course, speak for
every other individual on this earth, but I do not believe that I am a
very difficult person to understand. My life is based upon two very
simple, sweeping philosophies: pragmatism in actions and idealism in
thought. Thus, with these two attitudes, I characterize myself.
Pragmatism in
actions. I believe utterly in one of those old cliches: we are given
only a limited time upon this earth and every moment wasted is lost
forever. Therefore, I do not engage in those things that I view as
useless. The next question is obvious. What do I view as useless? In
reality, perhaps too many things and definitely too many to address in
one essay. However, I can indulge in the discussion of a few. Hate is a
wasted emotion. Hate accomplishes nothing. It does not relieve hunger.
It does not alleviate pain. It creates only avoidable aggression. I do
not believe in any kind of hate, including prejudice and racism. My
energies and time can be better spent elsewhere. Anger too. What does
anger do? Nothing. It frustrates us and aggravates us, and we can avoid
it. Being frustrated is not a pleasing experience for me. When I was
young, or rather, when I was younger than I am now, I would explode at
the smallest disturbances (I'm sorry mom and dad). Now, I have realized
that anger is a waste of time, and I no longer have a temper to lose. I
would much rather wallow in happiness. And in my happiness, I do not
worry much over my image in the eyes of others. The important word here
is much, for there are opinions of certain individuals about which I do
care a great deal, but these are few. They include my family, my close
friends, and those who possess the power to affect my life significantly
(for example, university admissions officers). Otherwise, I pay no
attention to whispers behind my back or vague rumors circulating in the
air above. As long as I know the truth, however harsh it may be, and
those that I care about know the truth, I am not troubled. The masses
may think as they wish. They are entitled. As can probably be observed
from this essay thus far, my outlook on life saves me more than a bit of
stress. I hate no one, I am never angry, and I really don't care what
most other people believe. It is quite a calming experience. Have no
fear though, stress pierces my existence from many other venues.
And now for the
other half of my personality. I am a hardcore idealist (and very naive).
I believe that I can change the world, and I intend to. Either one man
at a time, or a generation at a time, I will leave my stamp emblazoned
upon humanity. I maintain that there lies in man the ability to
accomplish anything and everything. Nothing is impossible. But before
changing the world, we must learn to change ourselves. And here enters
another one of my theories. There are two stages in resolving a problem,
and they are both equally important. First, the problem must be
identified and recognized. Then, the solution may be found. I know that
my profound theory sounds ridiculous and obvious, but many people never
even pass the first level. They know something is wrong and they
complain, but they do not take the time to divine the source of their
troubles. If only they would open their eyes a bit and look around, they
might find that the key to their dilemma was actually quite simple. Then
again, the answer might be more difficult than the problem itself.
Admitting the existence of a problem becomes even more difficult when
the issue concerns the self. I am continually striving to improve
myself, constantly seeking perfection. I sometimes ask others to
critique my personality and my actions and reveal what they regard as my
flaws. Then, I can better evaluate myself with their more objective
views. After that, the process is not complicated. I identify those
areas that I am not completely satisfied with and determine some means
to rectify the condition. So far, I have not had many difficulties with
this fix-it-yourself, or rather, this fix-yourself-yourself system. This
self-improvement has given me self-confidence as well as an optimistic
attitude on living. By demonstrating to myself that I alone can change
the many aspects of my persona, I have led myself to believe that all
aspects of life can be altered as well. All that is required is a bit of
will (and some intelligence helps too). I believe the will of man is the
greatest driving force in our lives.
So there it is.
My entire mentality has been reduced to a two page essay. Here and there
it's a bit foolish, but it is what I live by (until, of course, I find
better philosophies). Others may accept it or reject it, but I don't
mind much either way as long as it works for me.
Comments by
Admissions Officers who Assisted in the Creation of this Course
This strikes me as
aloof. It doesn't really make me like the kid-and that's what a good
essay should do!
I found this essay
to be trite and pretentious. It really tells me nothing of substance
about the author. I have no idea what he will bring to the incoming
class, what sorts of interests or activities he has been involved with,
what concrete goals he may have. The essay also has a self-righteous
feel to it that is annoying.
This essay has a
cumbersome beginning. This writer should just drop the first two
sentences and begin, "my life is based on. . ." then drop the next
sentence, "Thus, with these two attitudes, I characterize myself." No
one writes or talks that way; not if they wish for anyone to listen.
The author
blusters that he will "change the world." Then give me one concrete
example of a change you've already made. Be genuine enough to give the
reader a good-faith deposit on your lofty proclamations. As the saying
goes, "If you're gonna talk the talk, you better walk the walk."
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Buyuk Etkiler;Okudugunuz
bir kitap hayatinizi yeniden gozden gecirmenize neden oldu mu ?Herhangi bir
kisi hayatinizda sizeornek olup dusuncelerinizi degistirdi mi ? Iliskiler
bir essay icin iyi bir malzeme olabilir.Belkide bir ugrasi ve caba sizi
digger insanlardan ayiran bir ozelliktir.Belki bir akil hocaniz sizing bir
yorumunuzu kesvedip farkliliginizi anlamistir .Dunyaya hic bir baska acidan
baktiniz mi ?yada dunyayi tanimlamaniz nasil ? siz kimsiniz ? hayatinizdaki
detaylar nedir ? ozellikleriniz ? Astroloji sizing hayatinizi nasil
yonlendiriyor ?Bir cok Kabul komitesi aile haricindeki etkileri essay’lerde
gormek istemektedirler bunu unutmayin.Bunlar favori ogretmen etkileri, bir
kitap yada bir karakter gibidir.Bunun disindaki kisiler herhangi akliniza
gelen etki,hepsinin listelenmesinde yazinizi kolaylastiracaktir.
ORNEK
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Some say that
mankind is complex beyond comprehension. I cannot, of course, speak for
every other individual on this earth, but I do not believe that I am a
very difficult person to understand. My life is based upon two very
simple, sweeping philosophies: pragmatism in actions and idealism in
thought. Thus, with these two attitudes, I characterize myself.
Pragmatism in
actions. I believe utterly in one of those old cliches: we are given
only a limited time upon this earth and every moment wasted is lost
forever. Therefore, I do not engage in those things that I view as
useless. The next question is obvious. What do I view as useless? In
reality, perhaps too many things and definitely too many to address in
one essay. However, I can indulge in the discussion of a few. Hate is a
wasted emotion. Hate accomplishes nothing. It does not relieve hunger.
It does not alleviate pain. It creates only avoidable aggression. I do
not believe in any kind of hate, including prejudice and racism. My
energies and time can be better spent elsewhere. Anger too. What does
anger do? Nothing. It frustrates us and aggravates us, and we can avoid
it. Being frustrated is not a pleasing experience for me. When I was
young, or rather, when I was younger than I am now, I would explode at
the smallest disturbances (I'm sorry mom and dad). Now, I have realized
that anger is a waste of time, and I no longer have a temper to lose. I
would much rather wallow in happiness. And in my happiness, I do not
worry much over my image in the eyes of others. The important word here
is much, for there are opinions of certain individuals about which I do
care a great deal, but these are few. They include my family, my close
friends, and those who possess the power to affect my life significantly
(for example, university admissions officers). Otherwise, I pay no
attention to whispers behind my back or vague rumors circulating in the
air above. As long as I know the truth, however harsh it may be, and
those that I care about know the truth, I am not troubled. The masses
may think as they wish. They are entitled. As can probably be observed
from this essay thus far, my outlook on life saves me more than a bit of
stress. I hate no one, I am never angry, and I really don't care what
most other people believe. It is quite a calming experience. Have no
fear though, stress pierces my existence from many other venues.
And now for the
other half of my personality. I am a hardcore idealist (and very naive).
I believe that I can change the world, and I intend to. Either one man
at a time, or a generation at a time, I will leave my stamp emblazoned
upon humanity. I maintain that there lies in man the ability to
accomplish anything and everything. Nothing is impossible. But before
changing the world, we must learn to change ourselves. And here enters
another one of my theories. There are two stages in resolving a problem,
and they are both equally important. First, the problem must be
identified and recognized. Then, the solution may be found. I know that
my profound theory sounds ridiculous and obvious, but many people never
even pass the first level. They know something is wrong and they
complain, but they do not take the time to divine the source of their
troubles. If only they would open their eyes a bit and look around, they
might find that the key to their dilemma was actually quite simple. Then
again, the answer might be more difficult than the problem itself.
Admitting the existence of a problem becomes even more difficult when
the issue concerns the self. I am continually striving to improve
myself, constantly seeking perfection. I sometimes ask others to
critique my personality and my actions and reveal what they regard as my
flaws. Then, I can better evaluate myself with their more objective
views. After that, the process is not complicated. I identify those
areas that I am not completely satisfied with and determine some means
to rectify the condition. So far, I have not had many difficulties with
this fix-it-yourself, or rather, this fix-yourself-yourself system. This
self-improvement has given me self-confidence as well as an optimistic
attitude on living. By demonstrating to myself that I alone can change
the many aspects of my persona, I have led myself to believe that all
aspects of life can be altered as well. All that is required is a bit of
will (and some intelligence helps too). I believe the will of man is the
greatest driving force in our lives.
So there it is.
My entire mentality has been reduced to a two page essay. Here and there
it's a bit foolish, but it is what I live by (until, of course, I find
better philosophies). Others may accept it or reject it, but I don't
mind much either way as long as it works for me.
Comments by
Admissions Officers who Assisted in the Creation of this Course
This strikes me as
aloof. It doesn't really make me like the kid-and that's what a good
essay should do!
I found this essay
to be trite and pretentious. It really tells me nothing of substance
about the author. I have no idea what he will bring to the incoming
class, what sorts of interests or activities he has been involved with,
what concrete goals he may have. The essay also has a self-righteous
feel to it that is annoying.
This essay has a
cumbersome beginning. This writer should just drop the first two
sentences and begin, "my life is based on. . ." then drop the next
sentence, "Thus, with these two attitudes, I characterize myself." No
one writes or talks that way; not if they wish for anyone to listen.
The author blusters
that he will "change the world." Then give me one concrete example of a
change you've already made. Be genuine enough to give the reader a
good-faith deposit on your lofty proclamations. As the saying goes, "If
you're gonna talk the talk, you better walk the walk.
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Hayattaki Hedeflernizi;Asagidaki
alistirmada sorulan sorulari mumkun oldugu kadar yanitlayin.Birden fazla
yada yazabileceginiz kadar ornekler yazin.En cok arzuladiginiz bir olay yada
vahsi bir ruyaniz nedir ?Cocukken ne olmak isterdiniz ? eger su anda bir
gucunuz olsa –para yetenek v.b. neler yapardiniz ?Cocuk sahibi olmak
istermiydiniz ? Ne cesit bir evde yasamak isterdiniz ?Ne cesit arkadaslik
kurmak isterdiniz ?Eger cok zengin olup calisma zorunlulugunuz olmasaydi ne
yapardiniz ?Ikinci olarak biraz gercege yakin bir oyun secelim En favori
konunuz ne olurdu.yasaminizin ilk yirmi yilini dusunun ve hangi okula gidip
hangi major’u almak isterdiniz ?Bu okulda olmayan bir konuda olsa ornek
vermekten kacinmayin.Bu ornekleri yazarken gercek hedeflerinizide mantikli
bir cercevede yazmayi unutmayin yazinin balansini iyi tutmakta fayda vardir.
ORNEK
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At this juncture in
your life, what would be your ideal career and why?
I am most interested
in a career in psychoneuroimmunology. Scientists who work in this area
study the biological connection between the mind and immunological
factors relating to health and healing. This is my ideal occupation
because it includes my two criteria for a career: I would be doing
something to benefit society and performing a job that is enjoyable,
challenging and meaningful to me.
Throughout the
ages, scholars have tried to find ways to alleviate human pain. Although
multitudes of procedures have been tried, none have been completely
successful. Drugs can relieve pain temporarily or ease the symptoms of a
disease. Antibiotics can cure some illnesses but not every one and not
instantaneously. Regardless of the outcome of disease and treatment, the
patient may have to endure a great deal of pain. The mind, however, can
be a powerful tool. If people could learn to rehabilitate themselves
quicker with a positive attitude, we could, on the practical side of
things, reduce hospital stays and increase productivity, and, in
general, lead longer, happier, and healthier lives. I want to be able to
help people ease this possibly unnecessary suffering.
This career
promises the type of in-depth medical research combining a
multidisciplinary approach that greatly appeals to me. If the
neurological or genetic basis for why some people heal faster or more
effectively than others could be discovered, then we could develop
similar ways to treat others. People who recover faster and more fully
from certain diseases than the average person could be studied using a
variety of psychological, immunological, and neurological tests in an
attempt to detect any unique characteristics they might possess.
Many people have
hypotheses about different aspects of this subject, but much more
investigation needs to be done before we know anything for certain. I
want to be one of the individuals involved in basic research to advance
our knowledge in this area. Despite the fact that research on these
topics is in its infancy, I am very optimistic for its future impact on
human health and well-being. As I look forward to becoming a pioneer in
this area, I am prepared for what might be a long and sometimes
frustrating search. Yet I also envision groundbreaking discoveries or on
a more realistic scale, solving smaller pieces of a larger puzzle which
may lead to a long-awaited breakthrough.
I know how
difficult and also how rewarding research can be because both of my
parents are researchers, and I have done research projects for my
science courses. The most important thing, of course, is that humanity
may benefit. Such a pursuit of knowledge would be incredibly satisfying
because of its potential to help so many. To me, the call to a lifetime
of this work is irresistible.
Comments by Admissions Officers
who Assisted in the Creation of this Course
This essay could
have been good, but few personal details are related.
This essay is
ultimately rather dull. Very little of the author's personality comes
through. I am sure the author will turn out to be a dedicated student,
but the essay doesn't convey to me anything about what he will bring to
the class.
Yawn. "Reduce hospital stays and increase productivity. . . ." Did I
stray into a health insurance seminar? Wake me when it's over, and not a
moment before.
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